Ever Where

[Savvi]

Everything leads to 
something else
here in Nowheresville Consider this being the opening line
except the river
that steals through it
sleek as a secret reptile I like the assonance in this line
that finds itself in a temporary cage.  is it stealing through or in a cage, I was a bit confused by this

Elsewhere brings us
a step closer to the invisible,
the steep bank 
where grasses console the mud,
an abandoned bicycle
resting in the roots of a cypress. this stanza is a solid image

One stream feeds another
until the river goes south into wilderness,
freed from the anthropoid good use of internal rhyme
into its divine plan of rock and tree 
past the plains of fire
into the Gulf of pure existence.

We feed ourselves
on its disappearance
praying to the breeze across our faces. I like the sensation captured in the close

Makes me think of wanting to get out of a dead end town, longing to follow the river to where ever it goes. Double use of Feed in the last two stanza could easily be changed but it works best in the last stanza, really enjoyed the imagery and I have added some comment above. Savvi