06-25-2022, 12:26 AM
You and me,
land and sea
in Tender embrace,
Morning's lazy caress stretches to contentment.
The extra space between the first two stanzas is a good effect.
An arm embraces
a wave finding its sandy shore;
reaching, holding, repeating.
An arm embraces a wave,
land and sea
in Tender embrace,
Morning light’s lazy caress on tranquil tides,
time stretches to contentment.
Morning's lazy caress stretches to contentment.
The extra space between the first two stanzas is a good effect.
An arm embraces
a wave finding its sandy shore;
reaching, holding, repeating.
An arm embraces a wave,
Good to have the first land and sea imagery here. And good to have wave and arm on the same line in embrace.
However, that the wave goes away and returns, having it as you have, on the next line, is also good.
However, that the wave goes away and returns, having it as you have, on the next line, is also good.
repeatedly finding and holding its sand.
The world slips away,
our universe contained in a moment.
The world slips away,
our universe contained in a moment.
A world contained each moment slips away.
Land and sea.
Separate but never separated.
Land and sea.