06-17-2022, 06:15 PM
The revision makes things a lot clearer
As I see it, Jackson is dying of cancer or some type of terminal disease.
The example of the latest Texas school shooting is just to show that they “held out”.
The “only” is confusing, nevertheless. Were they supposed to have shown a bit of gumption and lasted longer? I don’t think that’s the thesis here, so it comes across as a bit odd.
And even if you removed the “only”, one hour isn’t all that long. So the confusion remains.
Of course, I may have missed some specific cultural reference entirely
As I see it, Jackson is dying of cancer or some type of terminal disease.
The example of the latest Texas school shooting is just to show that they “held out”.
The “only” is confusing, nevertheless. Were they supposed to have shown a bit of gumption and lasted longer? I don’t think that’s the thesis here, so it comes across as a bit odd.
And even if you removed the “only”, one hour isn’t all that long. So the confusion remains.
Of course, I may have missed some specific cultural reference entirely