06-11-2022, 11:44 AM
this is a piece thats hard to critique - the meaning is yours to exude and accept -
the only line i didnt follow was -
“ bone rent and broken” I think youre in this space of conceptual play around road, cars, accidents, life and how it passes on the road ( with or without incident) the wording just wasnt familiar to me - takes away from the piece as it leaves me going “ was that on purpose or am i missing a deeper meaning “
Other wise a really nice piece which im sure means more to you then I can imagine -
the only line i didnt follow was -
“ bone rent and broken” I think youre in this space of conceptual play around road, cars, accidents, life and how it passes on the road ( with or without incident) the wording just wasnt familiar to me - takes away from the piece as it leaves me going “ was that on purpose or am i missing a deeper meaning “
Other wise a really nice piece which im sure means more to you then I can imagine -