06-08-2022, 12:02 PM
(06-08-2022, 11:20 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote: The Old KnowThe old are the new young. We have yet to plug them into the network. It's a commin'
The old know how to fold a map,
to use a rotary phone and
untangle the cord.
They know the serenity in writing a letter,
the joy of receiving the reply,
the anticipation in between.
The old know that walking,
face in a phone is dangerous removing 'in a' adds a bit of humor.
so, they don’t. Cut this
They know how days are short
when long in years.
The old know the gift of loving for a lifetime,
and the loneliness of being left behind. The rhyme attempt here is out of place. 'For a liftime' is not needed.
never describe somebody as 'one' in youe poems, it is weak imo
The old know the only thing worse
than death,
is not living.
Thanks for the read,
Sc

