All I've Got Left Is Time Travel No. 2

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I don't think I was being helpful there at all, other than asking you to write a different poem, just because 
Having in mind:

                            In that open field
If you do not come too close, if you do not come too close,
On a summer midnight, you can hear the music
Of the weak pipe and the little drum
And see them dancing around the bonfire
The association of man and woman
In daunsinge, signifying matrimonie—
A dignified and commodiois sacrament.
Two and two, necessarye coniunction,
Holding eche other by the hand or the arm
Whiche betokeneth concorde. Round and round the fire
Leaping through the flames, or joined in circles,
Rustically solemn or in rustic laughter
Lifting heavy feet in clumsy shoes,
Earth feet, loam feet, lifted in country mirth
Mirth of those long since under earth
Nourishing the corn. Keeping time,
Keeping the rhythm in their dancing
As in their living in the living seasons
The time of the seasons and the constellations
The time of milking and the time of harvest
The time of the coupling of man and woman
And that of beasts. Feet rising and falling.
Eating and drinking. Dung and death.

davidgorman.com/4quartets/2-coker.htm

Well, I'll be writing another poem, but probably not about American Indians, not for a spell.

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Hello Tim-

Please do not be discouraged.  The idea for this series of poems is a good one.

I have some general suggestions:
- decide upon the number of poems/scenes that you want to describe
- do research on each piece to inject a degree of accuracy
- flesh out some ideas for each piece, and write rough drafts for each
- keep them 'geographically contained' so that the subjects are not too spread out
- explore different time periods, based upon available facts
- keep the language vivid, yet sparse, which helps to create a mirage-like feel
- use your descriptive powers to 'add flavor'  (you have a talent for that)
- bracket the body of each piece with one or two lines that occur in the present. These lines could be very similar.

I hope those suggestions help, because I am intriqued by what I know you can do with this series.  (No pressure...)
...Mark

Thanks for the detailed idea list, Mark.

The first poem I ever posted on Pig Pen was a western one:

http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-23255.html

And I've done more.  Maybe they can be part of the series.

Tim