Bus stop

[brynmawr1]

Cracked road
leads into mirage                How about "blurs"?


Yellow field,
herds of bulky shadow        This is the only line that rubs on me a bit.  I think mostly because of "herds".  I'm thinking cows is a field
migrating across                  how about "drifting"?


Glass box,
Sunlight streams
through its film

Well tailored bones              Wasn't this "man" when you first posted?  I kind of liked man better
sit patiently
for a days work                 I like the feel and image of this stanza.
to begin

SC,

  I agree with TqB about the snap shots, but I like it because it feels like a progression to the final stanza.  All of the imagery is stark and clear to me(whether my interpretation is correct or not).  i made some small suggestions but overall i like this.  Thanks,
bryn