06-04-2022, 07:16 AM
(06-04-2022, 02:24 AM)Semicircle Wrote: Cracked roadI only have one small change suggestion. This poem is like looking at four very different snapshots. Because of the title, I am expecting buses, so I'm reading references to structure to be a bus/buses (the mirage, the herd, the glass box) . Am I anywhere on the right track (not that it matters, because I like it). Your poems lend themselves to multiple interpretations which is good sometimes. I do it too much.
leads into mirage
Yellow field,
herds of bulky shadow
migrating across migrate?
Glass box,
Sunlight streams
through its film
Well tailored bones
sit patiently
for a days work
to begin

