05-27-2022, 01:18 PM
While I was fairly pleased with this upon posting, the ambiguity is too much.
Thank you to both Marks for reading and commenting.
I'll have a look at narrowing this.
Without explicating too much I'll say that "compromised" is a problem. On the one hand it is the perfect word, but on the other, it confuses the poem by adding a dimension I can't properly address in such a short piece. I may have even made the same mistake with the title... another layer not fully explained. All good lessons. It's always a challenge for me to pack big ideas into tiny packages.
Thank you to both Marks for reading and commenting.
I'll have a look at narrowing this.
Without explicating too much I'll say that "compromised" is a problem. On the one hand it is the perfect word, but on the other, it confuses the poem by adding a dimension I can't properly address in such a short piece. I may have even made the same mistake with the title... another layer not fully explained. All good lessons. It's always a challenge for me to pack big ideas into tiny packages.