Daffodil

[Mark A Becker]

Dapper gents
in yellow hats
dance for the sun
while they can.

This might work best as a monostitch: a title, then a single line.
It would help the short ‘a’ and ‘e’ sounds stand out.
I think ‘daffodils’, plural, as described by the plurals ‘gents’ and ‘hats’.

Daffodils
Dapper gents in yellow hats

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Dapper gents
in yellow hats
dance for the sun
while they can.

This might work best as a monostitch: a title, then a single line.
It would help the short ‘a’ and ‘e’ sounds stand out.
I think ‘daffodils’, plural, as described by the plurals ‘gents’ and ‘hats’.

Daffodils
Dapper gents in yellow hats

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With another look I see, that within (10) syllables you would have an incredible (9) vowel 'matches' !:
The short 'a' (3), 'e' (2), and 'i' (2) sounds, as well as (2) more with a long 'o'.
Interesting, as well, that the /-  trochee accents fall right in line: dapper gents in yellow hats
Even the title works out, daffodils Since readers pause at the line break, an unstressed syllable is implied.