Over-dozed
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Thanks to Bryn, Tim and Knot for the help.
I've posted a slight edit which has changed the last stanza to get rid of the 'water' repetition and added a bit extra in the last line.

I'm very pleased with how this has went, it's hard sometimes to know when to stop editing.

Much appreciated,

Mark
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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Messages In This Thread
Over-dozed - by Magpie - 07-24-2013, 10:31 PM
RE: Over-dozed - by Magpie - 05-16-2022, 08:56 PM
RE: Over-dozed - by brynmawr1 - 05-16-2022, 10:10 PM
RE: Over-dozed - by Magpie - 05-17-2022, 02:16 AM
RE: Over-dozed - by TranquillityBase - 05-17-2022, 06:59 AM
RE: Over-dozed - by Knot - 05-18-2022, 01:25 AM
RE: Over-dozed - by Magpie - 05-18-2022, 02:32 AM
RE: Over-dozed - by Knot - 05-18-2022, 03:18 AM
RE: Over-dozed - by TranquillityBase - 05-19-2022, 06:14 AM
RE: Over-dozed - by Magpie - 05-19-2022, 04:16 PM
RE: Over-dozed - by Knot - 05-19-2022, 08:05 PM



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