05-19-2022, 06:14 AM
Hey AR,
Just a note to say I really like the revision. I don't see the weakness in the ending that you refer to. I haven't studied Knot's suggestions, but seems a complete poem as it stands. That it was a heroin overdose was clear to me from the get go.
Not trying to discourage or disagree about revision. Just saying I like it as it is. The narrative is clear and precise.
Tim
Just a note to say I really like the revision. I don't see the weakness in the ending that you refer to. I haven't studied Knot's suggestions, but seems a complete poem as it stands. That it was a heroin overdose was clear to me from the get go.
Not trying to discourage or disagree about revision. Just saying I like it as it is. The narrative is clear and precise.
Tim