05-18-2022, 11:13 PM
(05-11-2022, 09:29 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:Thanks for the suggestions. The "your" really adds a lot to the story.(03-30-2022, 11:59 PM)Semicircle Wrote: Our hands linked together
in a bitter cage.
I wish when I licked my finger,
you would let me turn the page.
I lament day to day
about the wars that we wage.
You should have let me turn the page. maybe at the end, or not at all?
Tonight,
I killed you
in a frenzied rage.
Only, when I bit off my finger, your implies you use the other's finger to turn the page since they are dead.
would you turn the page.