Pursuit edit Final(for now)

[brynmawr1]

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Hi bryn.

It wasn't stroke but 'house of cards' that gave me pause. The meaning is basically 'something that must inevitably fail due to it's poor foundations', and I was struggling to see how that applied (still am!) How does/will the stroke fail?

though I might leave off the "is there".

Your poem, after all I did think there was something pleasing about have a question there though (especially given this is something you intend to read aloud to an audience.)

You might want to revisit the 'misty morning', I don't think it fares that well against the excellent 'blue heron' or the 'friend's laughter'.

Best, Knot

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Knot,

The 'metaphor works, for me, because the stroke only works if all the parts (of the stroke and rowers working together) are balanced so the boat stays set in the water and moves with the best efficiency.  It actually takes very little disturbance in that relationship to suck the energy from the boat's momentum.   I would also argue that failure isn't inevitable, the situation merely precarious.  I appreciate the discussion!
bryn