Pursuit edit Final(for now)

[Knot]

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Hi bryn.

It wasn't stroke but 'house of cards' that gave me pause. The meaning is basically 'something that must inevitably fail due to it's poor foundations', and I was struggling to see how that applied (still am!) How does/will the stroke fail?

though I might leave off the "is there".

Your poem, after all I did think there was something pleasing about have a question there though (especially given this is something you intend to read aloud to an audience.)

You might want to revisit the 'misty morning', I don't think it fares that well against the excellent 'blue heron' or the 'friend's laughter'.

Best, Knot

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