05-17-2022, 09:24 PM
Hi brynmawr1.
Bit late to the party, but I bring scissors.
I think this is rather overwritten (and I'm not sure how well it reads, aloud)
but I think there's a really nice piece that's struggling to find it's way out.
So, mindfull of you deadling, and taking a bit of a liberty ...
What is rowing but obsession?
A Sisyphean task,
pursuit of perfection.
through ache and blister.
Hour upon hour.
Each stroke a house of cards *
against which wind and wave conspire
Each catch a resurrection,
we push past ourselves,
hour upon hour.
A friend’s laughter across the water;
a blue heron caught in flight
in harmony, on misty mornings,
what better measure of us is there?
What better way to spend the hours?
*I like this couplet, but I think the house of cards image ill-suited to the context. Is there something (like 'catch'), a term specific to rowing, that might replace it?
Good luck with the ceremony.
Best, Knot
.
Bit late to the party, but I bring scissors.
I think this is rather overwritten (and I'm not sure how well it reads, aloud)
but I think there's a really nice piece that's struggling to find it's way out.
So, mindfull of you deadling, and taking a bit of a liberty ...
What is rowing but obsession?
A Sisyphean task,
pursuit of perfection.
through ache and blister.
Hour upon hour.
Each stroke a house of cards *
against which wind and wave conspire
Each catch a resurrection,
we push past ourselves,
hour upon hour.
A friend’s laughter across the water;
a blue heron caught in flight
in harmony, on misty mornings,
what better measure of us is there?
What better way to spend the hours?
*I like this couplet, but I think the house of cards image ill-suited to the context. Is there something (like 'catch'), a term specific to rowing, that might replace it?
Good luck with the ceremony.
Best, Knot
.