05-05-2022, 11:19 PM
Cheers for the comments Ambros and River! 
Looks like I have some work to do, also, thanks for the tip Ambrosial. I was wondering how to make previous versions of my poems.
I will edit accordingly.
also, Rivernotch, to disagree with this statement "Dreams tend to flourish in voids, too, so the second sentence doesn't seem particularly sensible."
In some instances of being trapped in a particular place, all of your dreams take place where you are trapped.
My grandpa went to prison for a long time, and all of his dreams now take place there, even though he is a free man now.
that's what I was going for, but if that is confusing, is there anything I can do to convey that better?
a mature genious-- (:
ambros you stinker
Looks like I have some work to do, also, thanks for the tip Ambrosial. I was wondering how to make previous versions of my poems.
I will edit accordingly.
also, Rivernotch, to disagree with this statement "Dreams tend to flourish in voids, too, so the second sentence doesn't seem particularly sensible."
In some instances of being trapped in a particular place, all of your dreams take place where you are trapped.
My grandpa went to prison for a long time, and all of his dreams now take place there, even though he is a free man now.
that's what I was going for, but if that is confusing, is there anything I can do to convey that better?
a mature genious-- (:
ambros you stinker