04-30-2022, 03:06 PM
(04-29-2022, 06:05 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: Hey semi slicer-Thanks for the critique,
I really like the first two lines, but the rhymes that follow are long stretches for a short piece.
Throwing stuff up to see if it sticks is fine, but this one bounced right off.
… Mark
I have adjusted accordingly.
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