04-16-2022, 10:29 PM
(04-12-2022, 01:17 PM)Semicircle Wrote: You can tread on usVery interesting poem. For me, it comes to a climax with the lines of stanza 3, my favorite lines in the poem. I don't quite get the final stanza. Perhaps it's the use of pronouns that Xlaterus mentions, or perhaps it's just not needed. I read it as the ocean being something else besides a body of water, though it could be that.
in our abundance.
some aren't stable-
watch your step now.
We coagulate underfoot,
falling away without sound
back into a struggling ocean
that clamors to support your feet.
You're running full sprint, trying to escape
ascending higher and higher, cresting the peek of your wave
reduced to a needle piercing clouds.
We understand, it's hard up there
and there is no escaping us,
so come down please.
Settle the ocean,
find peace,
die.

