Embers
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(04-13-2022, 09:42 AM)Stash Wrote:  A slash like smile,
cleaves faces in two, comma would work better here.
predators;
bait the killing room. 

Like freaks at a carnival, carnival freaks  .... just for the sake of brevity
with words that disembowel.
Feigning to be civilized,
"O how politely they growl.

A nightmare breathed life,  It is implied that this is nightmarish by 'the true monsters grimm'
Like true monsters Grimm.
Waiting in the shadows;
torturous, is their offering.

The darkness is unbending   unbending darkness... btw how does darkness bend?
as like blackest obsidian.
Fires that once burned;
embers flicker and dimm.     
I will come back with more critique, 
revise and I sha'll return.
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Messages In This Thread
Embers - by Stash - 04-13-2022, 09:42 AM
RE: Embers - by CRNDLSM - 04-13-2022, 09:49 AM
RE: Embers - by Semicircle - 04-13-2022, 09:52 AM
RE: Embers - by brynmawr1 - 05-14-2022, 10:57 AM



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