Ascension
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(03-28-2022, 11:49 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  I climbed all the way up,
what is my journey's reward?
a naked monk 'off guard'
Hi Sc for the sake of brevity could you drop 'what is' from line 2 
i'm also wondering if you need 'off guard' is it not implied by the fact that he's naked.

just a couple of thoughts
mark
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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Messages In This Thread
Ascension - by Semicircle - 03-28-2022, 11:49 AM
RE: A sign from the universe - by Magpie - 03-28-2022, 09:03 PM
RE: A sign from the universe - by Mark A Becker - 03-29-2022, 01:48 AM
RE: A sign from the universe - by Magpie - 03-29-2022, 06:29 AM
RE: A sign from the universe - by Tiger the Lion - 03-29-2022, 07:24 AM
RE: A sign from the universe - by Semicircle - 03-29-2022, 07:49 AM
RE: A sign from the universe - by Tiger the Lion - 03-29-2022, 08:19 AM



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