Iasos (Edit 2.0, Mark, Knot, Rowens)

[busker]

I don't see where I added anything to the betterment of this poem.

The only thing I really said about it was the word canvas. And I didn't really mean it.
And you kept it in.

For what it’s worth, I don’t think this pome is quite there. It’s got a few possibly nice images, but in the end doesn’t really have a convincing thesis. I just wanted to finish it.
Your feedback was that something’s missing, and so was that of the others.
When I re examined the pome, I found it to be a putrid mess. The feedback helped me see it in a more critical light. The specifics are sometimes important (at least to me), sometimes not, but it’s always good to know if the pome as a whole reads well or doesn’t, and your inputs helped there (i.e. that there was a simplicity in it, in a good way)