03-26-2022, 08:49 AM
Thanks Rowens and Tim for the good suggestions, i've wrote another version incorporating them.
As regards 'blue note' it is somewhat essential to the poem https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blue_note
so i dropped the first blue because it is also the title and i think it still works that way.
as for the original version i suppose it was my attempt at an ekphrastic poem like Langston Hughes 'Weary Blues', i think that will be something that i will work on separately as there are some good parts to it.
many thanks
mark
As regards 'blue note' it is somewhat essential to the poem https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blue_note
so i dropped the first blue because it is also the title and i think it still works that way.
as for the original version i suppose it was my attempt at an ekphrastic poem like Langston Hughes 'Weary Blues', i think that will be something that i will work on separately as there are some good parts to it.
many thanks
mark
wae aye man ye radgie