03-24-2022, 07:58 AM
Many thanks Knot, you've reminded me to be more minimal again, it's easy to forget.
I like your suggestion of how to start the poem, i've posted an edit. i've changed the order because the place you'll find the .'blue note' is in the 'melancholia of glass on steel', nice phrase cheers
As regards 'fiery hands', Reverend Gary Davis has a tune where he sings "i got fiery fingers and i got fiery hands and when i get on up to heaven i'm gonna join the fiery band" and he's blues so i thought it would be a common idea but i checked it out and it's not.
some of the repetition was intentional trying to imitate a blues lyric but i can see how it didn't work.
cheers for your thoughts, it's been a big help
mark
I like your suggestion of how to start the poem, i've posted an edit. i've changed the order because the place you'll find the .'blue note' is in the 'melancholia of glass on steel', nice phrase cheers
As regards 'fiery hands', Reverend Gary Davis has a tune where he sings "i got fiery fingers and i got fiery hands and when i get on up to heaven i'm gonna join the fiery band" and he's blues so i thought it would be a common idea but i checked it out and it's not.
some of the repetition was intentional trying to imitate a blues lyric but i can see how it didn't work.
cheers for your thoughts, it's been a big help
mark
wae aye man ye radgie