03-19-2022, 10:10 AM
(03-19-2022, 09:53 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:The ambiguity of that first line serves to distract from an otherwise fine poem(03-19-2022, 12:05 AM)Semicircle Wrote:not quite strangulation - just playing slide guitar(03-18-2022, 02:29 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote: bottleneckI like the usage of, 'a human singing'
listening to your moans
i often hear
a human singing sounds like bliss
and i feelĀ
free
makes it sound like the narrator
really is enjoying what he is doing,
which I assume to be strangulation.
although i wanted it to be ambiguous, i thought that people might think i was speaking about a traffic jam.
back to the drawing board
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