bottleneck guitar
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(03-19-2022, 09:53 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  
(03-19-2022, 12:05 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  
(03-18-2022, 02:29 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  bottleneck
listening to your moans
i often hear
a human singing sounds like bliss
and i feelĀ 
free
I like the usage of, 'a human singing'
makes it sound like the narrator
really is enjoying what he is doing,
which I assume to be strangulation.
not quite strangulation - just playing slide guitar
although i wanted it to be ambiguous, i thought that people might think i was speaking about a traffic jam.
back to the drawing board

mark
The ambiguity of that first line serves to distract from an otherwise fine poem
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Messages In This Thread
bottleneck guitar - by Magpie - 03-18-2022, 02:29 AM
RE: bottleneck - by Semicircle - 03-19-2022, 12:05 AM
RE: bottleneck - by Magpie - 03-19-2022, 09:53 AM
RE: bottleneck - by busker - 03-19-2022, 10:10 AM
RE: bottleneck - by Semicircle - 03-19-2022, 01:02 PM
RE: bottleneck guitar - by Magpie - 03-19-2022, 10:54 PM
RE: bottleneck guitar - by Knot - 03-20-2022, 12:36 AM
RE: bottleneck guitar - by Magpie - 03-20-2022, 03:20 AM
RE: bottleneck guitar - by rowens - 03-20-2022, 09:15 PM
RE: bottleneck guitar - by Magpie - 03-20-2022, 09:59 PM



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