Only love (Edit 1.0, Tiger)
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(03-19-2022, 04:20 AM)busker Wrote:  Only love

There is only love
and those against it,
through the ages. Only love,
and an autumnal memory 
like trees in microburbs 
soaring towards the moon;
only love, and the cry
of Achilles, through the ages.
I feel like the poem would read stronger if you struck "only" everywhere but in the title. There's a cliche feel to repeating "only love" that somehow gets a pass when it's in the title. Plus the title implies the "only" to the rest of the piece.
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Only love (Edit 1.0, Tiger) - by busker - 03-19-2022, 04:20 AM
RE: Only love - by Tiger the Lion - 03-19-2022, 05:18 AM
RE: Only love - by busker - 03-19-2022, 05:36 AM



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