02-25-2022, 07:52 AM
(This post was last modified: 02-25-2022, 07:54 AM by Tiger the Lion.)
(02-24-2022, 10:45 AM)rowens Wrote: The answer to your last stanza:Looking at this with fresh eyes today, I think "sheep" might be a cheap word with somewhat forced contemporary connotations. I'm thinking "cattle" might be a more disciplined word choice. Not necessarily for the sake of this poem, but more as to my thought process moving forward. Wondering if "sheep" is somewhat a whore of a word, at least in 2022.
Two of a kind.
Love with no period
Edit: plus I think manner/cattle has a nice assonance to it. -