A Natural Remedy
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(02-18-2022, 08:12 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  A Natural Remedy

I wanted to tell you
about a problem I had,
but got distracted
when a bird bounced
off my window.

It was an ordinary jay
who appeared
to be OK
when I looked outside
to check on it.

Momentarily startled
as me, it fully recovered
and just flew away.
But it made me forget
what I first meant to say.
I like how the reader’s attention moves from the problem, to the bird, to worrying about the bird, to relief…in the end, forgetting that the poem began with something about a problem 
The bird bouncing off the window was star(t)ling 

Good one
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A Natural Remedy - by Mark A Becker - 02-18-2022, 08:12 AM
RE: A Natural Remedy - by Semicircle - 02-18-2022, 08:22 AM
RE: A Natural Remedy - by Tiger the Lion - 02-18-2022, 08:32 AM
RE: A Natural Remedy - by busker - 02-21-2022, 07:37 PM



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