02-18-2022, 03:59 AM
Thanks, Knot,
I really do appreciate your suggestions, but I already gave this one to my wife.
I was originally going to go with the ending you suggest, but brought those lines up to the top, mainly because I wanted the title to be the first line.
Honestly, I wrote the first draft in a few minutes, and had it fully formed in under an hour.
If I give my wife a re-write it won’t have the same effect: I loved hearing her read it back to me.
That said, I love your version.
I really do appreciate your suggestions, but I already gave this one to my wife.
I was originally going to go with the ending you suggest, but brought those lines up to the top, mainly because I wanted the title to be the first line.
Honestly, I wrote the first draft in a few minutes, and had it fully formed in under an hour.
If I give my wife a re-write it won’t have the same effect: I loved hearing her read it back to me.
That said, I love your version.