Ash Woods

[Mark A Becker]

I was going to keep looking at it, but I liked the fake end-rhymes too much.

My favorite "fake" end-rhyme is "mouthed over/magnolia".  That's a really good one.

Another good one is "apocalypse/the time torn fence" .

Also, some good assonance/consonance:
"A yard like a garden" , "cinderblock storage shack"

If you keep looking at it you may wanna change something, but this one holds up very well- the more I read it, the more I like it.