New Yellow

[dukealien]

Swaying deciduous
bobbing up and down in ripples of yellow.
Whirlpools of leaves and night lamps
in a starless sky.


Set adrift in an ocean of honey,
with a yellow-toothed-grin.
Don't know where it ended
or when it will begin.


Whispers calling me back
dissipate away.
Yellow thoughts
are all that stay.

Some good images here - my general suggestion is to economize even further (for example, "up and down" is implied by "bobbing," so could be cut).

Your gradual introduction of rhyme is interesting - none in S1, partial in S2, and full in S3.  Fits nicely with the wide net of images at the beginning which then centers progressively on the speaker - more rhyme, more self-focused.

Without wishing to be too intensive in basic, two word choices made me scratch my head:  "deciduous" in L1 and "dissipate" in S3.  For "deciduous" I itch to say "deciduously," making it an adverb for "swaying."  You don't use punctuation - the line can be read with implied commas ("swaying, deciduous,") framing "deciduous" as an adjective, and that works.  "[D]issipate away" is another case, like "up and down," where the elaboration seems unnecessary to me.  The line might end with something which describes how they dissipate  (though it's true, they might dissipate but remain, making "away" relevant).

On the whole, it has a theme and mild images that make a mood.  Nice.