02-10-2022, 01:48 AM
(This post was last modified: 02-10-2022, 05:41 AM by Quixilated.)
Hello Mark, an excellent poem which has generated a lively discussion.
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And to that point, I did want to say, Mark, that I did enjoy reading this poem. "Primordial" is one of my all time favorite words. Also, I very much enjoyed the "explosion of fish and fowl," though I might be imagining it more 'explody' than you intended, still, it's a dramatic image and it makes the poem pop. I think of those nature shows where suddenly an entire flock of birds take flight all at once and the air is filled with the sound of flapping wings and bird calls. And also I like the ending lines which provide much food for thought (as we have seen).
Note to members: As this is a poetry forum, I have moved the discussion side of things into a discussion forum. For further comments of that nature please see a discussion on origins. All further arguments or proof of knowing things must be posted there. It is protocol to remove a discussion when it is no longer about the poem. Thank you.
And to that point, I did want to say, Mark, that I did enjoy reading this poem. "Primordial" is one of my all time favorite words. Also, I very much enjoyed the "explosion of fish and fowl," though I might be imagining it more 'explody' than you intended, still, it's a dramatic image and it makes the poem pop. I think of those nature shows where suddenly an entire flock of birds take flight all at once and the air is filled with the sound of flapping wings and bird calls. And also I like the ending lines which provide much food for thought (as we have seen).
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara