Thinking outside the box

[dukealien]

A hawk stalked a fox on a walk in the woods
The fox came upon a box hiding some goods
The box had a lock and the hawk knocked on wood
But I forgot the plot it wasn't any good
Cause hawks eat foxes and foxes eat hawks
And neither would ever work together this socks
Animal fables teach kids good thoughts
I have to find a way to think outside the box

What if the hawk knew the box had a rabbit
And hunters were coming back to it to grab it
So the fox hit the lock with rocks to open it
Doesn't make sense the hawk would eat it dagnabit
They're both so dang clever though opening locks
I'd believe it, or flying it high to smash it on rocks
I just want them both to be chased away by wasps
I just want to teach kids to think outside the box

Foxes and hawks, oxen and crocs
This doesn't have to make sense if it rocks
Writing songs is not as obnoxious
As sometimes thinking outside the box is
I'm trying to think outside the box

This is a lot of fun - I picture it illustrated by Dr. Seuss.  Complete with author sweating over his fat, slightly kinked pencil... but to work.

This is difficult to critique (I complain) because it's meant to be a little ramshackle; smoothing is not improving.  For example, rhyme seems to call for more or less rhythmic lines... but this is supposed to be a humorous commentary, so rhymes in unequal lines are just fine.  Nevertheless...

Could comfortable clunkiness stand "must" in place of "have to" in the last line of S1?  Similarly, you could replace "had" with "held" in S2L1.  Not too smooth, and a little more descriptive, perhaps.  With more hesitation, you might replace "flying it high" with "lift it" in S2L6.   And I do itch to remove "just" from the last line of S3 for a return to the starting meter - closure for the stanza, y'know.

A similar mischievous itch begs to see "hawkses" in S3L1, but forget it (g) .  However, a serious suggestion is to change "songs" in S3L3 to "song lyrics.

Most serious suggestion:  the last line is problematic.  True, it's a coda.  But (1) is it necessary?  And (2) could it match meter just a bit, if it adds anything to the preceding lines of S3?

Hope that's not too harsh for moderate!  It's a nice concept and doesn't want to be too polished.

BTW, a lovely sentiment from the good Dr., just noticed while searching out correct spelling of the pen-name 

"Be who you are and say what you feel
for those who mind don't matter
and those who matter don't mind."

Wisdom - no wonder the woke cancelled him!