Casualty

[dukealien]

Hey duke-

I'm not a fan of haiku/senryu titles. 

"opens" was the correct choice, but the other words, not so much.  Pink-red splotch on bruised mauve sunrise is redundant, stretching to fill the syllable count.

There's only so much that can happen in 17 syllables, making each of them count that much more.

I have as much trouble as the next person trying to write these.
Mark

I agree, "mauve" is weak.  Replacing "[P]ink-red" with "cerise" would be the same sort of thing, but worse and lose the blood association.  Not defending my word choice, just rattling an empty head containing no good alternatives.

And now, to bundle up and shovel fallen clouds off my driveway and sidewalk.   Living a thousand miles north of last year, but (so far) the electricity has stayed on here!