Senescence

[Mark A Becker]

Hey Tim-

You said, "I may have tinkered too much..."  and I agree. 

You may want to set aside the original, and latest rev for awhile.  Circling back around to it may help.  When I do that, I find that problem areas become more apparent, and a bit easier to solve. 

That said, the latest version needed to retain a mention of the friends. 

Still, let it rest, and simmer.  It'll still be there later. 

Mark

ps. When things are driving me crazy I just get out and start walking.  Slow it down a little...