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Sundowning (was Isolation)
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01-20-2022, 11:31 PM
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Hi TqB, like the revision (though still think 'pointing' is redundant)
 My only niggle is with 'falling' - it suggests a rapidity/speed that seems out of kilter with the rest. Maybe something like 'faltering'? And you could possibly leave a space between lines 8 and 9?
Anyway, good job!
Best, Knot
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Sundowning (was Isolation) - by TranquillityBase - 01-13-2022, 11:47 PM
RE: Isolation - by Knot - 01-14-2022, 01:16 AM
RE: Isolation - by Mark A Becker - 01-14-2022, 07:56 AM
RE: Isolation - by TranquillityBase - 01-16-2022, 11:18 PM
RE: Isolation - by Knot - 01-17-2022, 01:02 AM
RE: Isolation - by TranquillityBase - 01-18-2022, 07:47 AM
RE: Isolation - by Xlateralus - 01-18-2022, 01:58 PM
RE: Isolation - by Knot - 01-18-2022, 10:09 PM
RE: Isolation - by TranquillityBase - 01-20-2022, 08:28 AM
RE: Isolation - by Mark A Becker - 01-19-2022, 01:04 AM
RE: Isolation - by Knot - 01-20-2022, 10:09 PM
RE: Isolation - by TranquillityBase - 01-20-2022, 11:11 PM
RE: Isolation - by Knot - 01-20-2022, 11:31 PM
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