Writing poetry
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(01-20-2022, 04:00 AM)busker Wrote:  Writing poetry

Always, in the night 
is poetry made beautiful
on a black screen, white letters 
tracing your sandalled feet
around a colonial city grand as its ghosts,
moonlight glistening on its  vast, nonsensical colonnades of words.
The first two lines seem too blunt for the richness that starts with "on a black screen..."  Any way way to say that in a more, I don't know, dreamy way?

Poetry in the night
made beautiful
on a black screen....
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Writing poetry - by busker - 01-20-2022, 04:00 AM
RE: Writing poetry - by TranquillityBase - 01-20-2022, 08:53 AM
RE: Writing poetry - by busker - 01-20-2022, 10:48 AM
RE: Writing poetry - by Mark A Becker - 01-20-2022, 11:32 AM



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