Sundowning (was Isolation)

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Hi Tqb,

like the revision, with two exceptions.
The last line (it doesn't really work there, and I still think it would make a better title.)
The second is 'diminishing' (it feels redundant, given 'synchronise ... to the setting sun' do you need it?)
And if pushed, I'd also revisit 'vastly'

I'm going for an almost commercial sounding jingle* here (but about something wholly non-commercial of course).  At least that's how it sounds in my head.  Losing "vastly" would kill that for me.  You have a point on "diminishing", tho I still like it a lot so....

So, that's why I put that last line, last, for the jingle* effect.

Does any of that change your reading of it?

TqB

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*jingle is the wrong word...."salesman's spiel'......