Sundowning (was Isolation)

[Knot]

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Hi Tqb,

like the revision, with two exceptions.
The last line (it doesn't really work there, and I still think it would make a better title.)
The second is 'diminishing' (it feels redundant, given 'synchronise ... to the setting sun' do you need it?)
And if pushed, I'd also revisit 'vastly'


So easy anyone can do it.


For surprisingly little cost
you can increase
the voices curled inside
the empty chambers
of the revolver at your head.

Merely synchronize
your heartbeat
to the setting of the sun
and erase the red music
at the edges of the flesh
until there is no horizon.


Best, Knot

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