Winter Solstice

[tribaltea33]

There is very compelling imagery throughout this.  I'm stumbling through the grammar and I




Thanks for the feedback. The grammar is intentional. I agree about child's play light (it means daylight - everyone wants the ease of a long day because long nights are challenging). I will keep chewing through the editing and take your feedback into consideration. Can I ask what you mean by preachy? Thank you

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"There is very compelling imagery throughout this.  I'm stumbling through the grammar and I'm not sure if that's what I like about it."

I want to second C. on his opening observation and address his last thought.  It is written in what almost seems like a different dialict of English and that awkardness is so consistent I hate to see it corrected because that is part of the power of this poem.

The grammar is intentional. I'm British and it's kind of inspired by ye olde English. Thank you for the feedback