10-27-2021, 10:13 PM
Hi Knot,
I apologize for taking so long to respond to your post. I had to take care of a health issue. Thanks for coming back to this. You make some valid points.
Re: The title is a bit of a play on words which I’m afraid perhaps does not do the job. The double entendre of something understated and filing something under the heading: “Statement” is what I was going for but somehow missed the mark. Not one of my better titles I admit.
Re: The cactus pear image/metaphor was an allusion intended to mirror the precariousness of the human condition and yes the syringes frequently found on beaches in Calabrian beaches. One was not located too far from the bus depot. It was also one of my father’s favourite fruits.
Re: Writing a fourth stanza might help. The problem is figuring out what to include in my “Understatement” without overstating the argument.
Thanks for reconsidering the poem and giving me valuable feedback. Much obliged.
Best,
Beowulf
I apologize for taking so long to respond to your post. I had to take care of a health issue. Thanks for coming back to this. You make some valid points.
Re: The title is a bit of a play on words which I’m afraid perhaps does not do the job. The double entendre of something understated and filing something under the heading: “Statement” is what I was going for but somehow missed the mark. Not one of my better titles I admit.
Re: The cactus pear image/metaphor was an allusion intended to mirror the precariousness of the human condition and yes the syringes frequently found on beaches in Calabrian beaches. One was not located too far from the bus depot. It was also one of my father’s favourite fruits.
Re: Writing a fourth stanza might help. The problem is figuring out what to include in my “Understatement” without overstating the argument.
Thanks for reconsidering the poem and giving me valuable feedback. Much obliged.
Best,
Beowulf