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Mark A Becker Offline

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10-19-2021, 08:54 PM

Hi Dale-

I'd suggest scratching "is only", subbing "gained" for "bought", and bringing "with coins" into L.2, after "bought" (or "gained").

That's all,
Mark

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Wisdom - by Erthona - 10-19-2021, 11:52 AM

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RE: Wisdom - by RiverNotch - 10-19-2021, 04:59 PM

RE: Wisdom - by Mark A Becker - 10-19-2021, 08:54 PM

RE: Wisdom - by Erthona - 12-08-2021, 09:47 AM

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