In What We Trust (Final)

[Mark A Becker]

The description of Buck is more important than the setting, IMO. The last three strophes deal with the philosophical question but as with the original, they still tell more than they show. I think the core of the poem is that Buck teaches you something. The rest is scenery and should be given less space.

Thanks Paul,
Yes, you've put it succintly. This one needs to describe Buck, more than the scenery.

I've made some changes, that shorten it, and I'm very, very slowly heading down to 20 words...

Mark