10-10-2021, 09:23 AM
Hi Tim-
This one and "Molloy" find you veering toward prose poetry, and abruptly away from the surreal pieces offered by "Telegrammatica" and "Watt's Reply".
I'm sure that yer aware that Chaplin played "Hitler" as Adenoid Hynkel" in the "Great Dictator", and apparently Hitler was a big Chaplin fan, and may have actually watched the "Great Dictator".
I was hoping that this one would focus more on Adolph (in Hell) being forced to watch that film over and over, and finally being directed by Chaplin in never ending versions of that slapstick role, with the audience laughing at him (Adolph as Adenoid), eternally.
There is an awful lot of telling in this piece, and it needs a lot more showing.
Anywho, I have a feeling that you'll gravitate toward a middle ground in the future, between surreal and prose poems- where your best work lies, in my estimation.
Always like reading yer stuff,
Mark
This one and "Molloy" find you veering toward prose poetry, and abruptly away from the surreal pieces offered by "Telegrammatica" and "Watt's Reply".
I'm sure that yer aware that Chaplin played "Hitler" as Adenoid Hynkel" in the "Great Dictator", and apparently Hitler was a big Chaplin fan, and may have actually watched the "Great Dictator".
I was hoping that this one would focus more on Adolph (in Hell) being forced to watch that film over and over, and finally being directed by Chaplin in never ending versions of that slapstick role, with the audience laughing at him (Adolph as Adenoid), eternally.
There is an awful lot of telling in this piece, and it needs a lot more showing.
Anywho, I have a feeling that you'll gravitate toward a middle ground in the future, between surreal and prose poems- where your best work lies, in my estimation.
Always like reading yer stuff,
Mark