10-09-2021, 10:42 PM
(This post was last modified: 10-09-2021, 10:45 PM by RiverNotch.)
Of course, plants and animals are just minerals with extra steps xD
I feel like it could be pithier -- afaik 5-7-5 is just a nice plus in English haiku/senryu, since English is not as pithy a language as Japanese. "Minerals win" for the ending, and something less redundant for the first line. Nice work though
Though I just thought of a sly variation.
Three-sided war:
plant, animal, mineral---
viruses win.
I feel like it could be pithier -- afaik 5-7-5 is just a nice plus in English haiku/senryu, since English is not as pithy a language as Japanese. "Minerals win" for the ending, and something less redundant for the first line. Nice work though
Though I just thought of a sly variation.
Three-sided war:
plant, animal, mineral---
viruses win.