10-09-2021, 02:12 AM
Hey duke-
Not a fan of titles for haiku, but without the title this one would be very difficult to decipher.
A title like “drones” might be too explicit.
The 2nd line is an OK substitute for the child’s game of “animal-vegetable-mineral.”
Finding a better way of contrasting drone strikes to child’s play may be asking too much of haiku.
All in all, you made the connection, and I got the gist of it.
Interesting that the inanimate “minerals” win, since they would require an animate agent (like an animal/person).
Mark
Not a fan of titles for haiku, but without the title this one would be very difficult to decipher.
A title like “drones” might be too explicit.
The 2nd line is an OK substitute for the child’s game of “animal-vegetable-mineral.”
Finding a better way of contrasting drone strikes to child’s play may be asking too much of haiku.
All in all, you made the connection, and I got the gist of it.
Interesting that the inanimate “minerals” win, since they would require an animate agent (like an animal/person).
Mark