Eye of Ajax
#3
Good work duke-

As war becomes remote-controlled
it paradoxically grows less remote


Very astute observation.

"...riding it to local execution"

That's a killer phrase.

No wonder their opponents drag
such Americans as they can catch
through their village like Achilles
‘round the fated walls of Troy.


Bravo. The last stanza speaks to the endless cycle of wars, while adding an immediate, personal touch; great comparison between "then" and "now". 
The slightly shorter length of the last line adds punch; the accents fall effectively, as well.

Thanks,
Mark
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Messages In This Thread
Eye of Ajax - by dukealien - 10-01-2021, 06:01 AM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by TranquillityBase - 10-01-2021, 06:19 AM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by Mark A Becker - 10-01-2021, 06:41 AM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by busker - 10-01-2021, 12:37 PM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by RiverNotch - 10-01-2021, 02:29 PM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by Tiger the Lion - 10-01-2021, 02:52 PM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by Knot - 10-02-2021, 12:59 AM
RE: Eye of Ajax - by dukealien - 10-02-2021, 06:52 AM



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