In What We Trust (4)

[Mark A Becker]

Great work Mark.  

One minor quibble about this line in stanza 4,  "can seem so finely attuned to something". Why "seem"?  I'm in no doubt that dog sees more of God than we do.

Tim

Thanks Tim,
Since I really don't know what dogs sense, it's pretty anthropomorphic of me to ascribe human qualties to an animal, and that's why I used "can seem". That said, I, too, am certain that dog sense is far keener than human sense (in more ways than one.)  

I did make a very slight change from "can seem" to "seems", to emphasize the smoothness of the "S" sounds: "...how is it that a simple dog
seems so finely attuned to something". 

I also thought that arranging this one in six line stanzas (sestets) presented a more cohesive whole; better symmetry.  I also toned down the (anthropocentric) telling, and tried to show that human tendency in a more subtle way.   

All of the constructive critiques offered have been invaluable to revising this one... wOOf !

Mark