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Little lines under the eye. (No period, that creates a fragment.)
Lying under the sky. (Again, no period.  Also, it is difficult for me to tell what or who is lying under the sky.  No subject is provided, so the reader assumes one of the nouns from the previous line is meant to be doing the lying.  However, I cannot picture lines or the eye 'lying under the sky,' so I am assuming the narrator is doing the action. Perhaps if you switch these first two lines?)
They all begin to cry;  (Wasn't sure who 'they' are.  The lines? The eyes?)
nothing but a sigh.

Shrugging off the day,
almost as if to say: 
what come what may  
as I continue to lay.   (This sentence is also a fragment.  However, if you put this last line at the beginning of the stanza and take off the 'as,' it will resolve the issue and the action of who is doing the shrugging will be clearer.  

Some stay, some go, (The first comma should probably be a semicolon. The second comma is not needed.)
if they feel low (but do put a comma after 'low.')
and you should know, (no comma here)
when you feel slow.  (These four lines are a bit vague.  I'm not entirely certain what they mean.  I think the poem might be stronger without them.  Or you could try to make them more specific?) 

But I am lying,
not here nore nor there,
not unaware;  (No semicolon, just a comma.)
without a care.

(This next bit is my favorite and where I think the poem shines.) 

Upwards is impossibly blue,
and then the night is black all the way through.
The sun and moon pirouette around them; (This is my favorite line in the poem.  Nice imagery.  Not sure who 'them' is, though?)
my laying will continue. (The phrasing here feels awkward to me.  Is there another way to say this?)

Someday, not far away. (comma not period to avoid a fragment.)
Staring up at the sky, my bones will stay,  (I like the image.  It forces the reader to picture a skeleton lying face up, as they often do.  I didn't realize the skeleton was the one staring up at the sky on the first read,  as the narrator has also been looking up this whole time.  Would it work to switch those two phrases?  Bones first and then staring? 'Sky' still works as a rhyme with 'away,' so you might be able to do it without having to change the words.) 
and my soal soul will leave on a peaceful voyage back to the stars.

Hello Kerbonzo, 
I think the strongest parts of your poem are stanzas two, five, and six.  You could play around with condensing it down to those three stanzas, see what you think? (This is just one opinion.  Always do what works for you in your edits.)   I especially like the imagery of the sun and moon pirouetting and also the skeleton staring up at the sky in the same manner that the narrator has been doing through the rest of the poem. 

Several of your lines are sentence fragments.  This is easily fixed.  While it is possible to have sentence fragments in poetry, it should be done carefully and with intention.  Some fragments can confuse the reader as it becomes unclear which noun is doing what actions. I pointed out the ones that made understanding difficult for me and explained why. 

I hope this helps.
Thank you for posting,
--Quix

This is very helpful. Thank you for being honest. 

I will tinker around and see what I can do.