The End of My Friends

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I did change the lines where I mentioned the gun called Abuse. I changed it to a blade instead. However, he technically didn't die from abuse, the first part of the poem is about his overdose by taking drugs, just like my other friend's death is about her suicide even though abuse was probably a main cause for that. 

Blade is a good word choice.

I'll rewrite that other bit, as well, about how she claimed that she was abused.   You could just cut the line.

I'd shorten the poem but I don't feel that it would do justice to my friends and it's a very sentimental thing for me. 

Understood.  I'm suggesting more condensing it, not wholesale cuts.    

I'd take the dates out as well but if you put two and two together, it gives more insight into the reason why I'm so affected by things. My gal friend died nine days before my birthday and my guy friend died six days before another birthday.  Sorry, I hate math   missed that completely

I'd leave out the rest of the lines that I wrote too but once again, it's implying that my lover is a drug addict, and the previous lines could confuse the reader without more clarity and they might think instead that because of his suffering, my lover might turn to drugs or alcohol to numb things, when it is a known fact that he's an addict.
 
As above, I'm not saying cut the lines entirely, just look to see that every line is really necessary to tell your story.